Sunday, 11 January 2009

Walk in the clouds


Well, at least the escalator is going up, my career is going nowhere, Rohan has left me and here I am at the mall with a maxed out credit card with payday two weeks away. I have absolutely no clue what I am doing here as I simply don’t have the dough for a spot of Retail Therapy.

I reach the top and who's that?? ... Oh God, it’s Rohan, my ex-boyfriend. I backtrack, miss a step and roll all the way to the bottom.

The next thing I remember is a feeling of weightlessness, a soothing calm as if nothing mattered. I am walking on clouds towards a bright light. As I near it, I hear Rohan’s voice calling me.

Surprised, I look down where I see the scene at the mall; there I am or rather my body is at the bottom of the escalator with Rohan holding it in his arms and crying.

As I start walking towards him, a chariot with angels emerges from somewhere in the bright light and approaches me. I suddenly don’t want to leave Rohan and start running, but the chariot draws alongside me and I feel myself being lifted by the angels. I plead with them to release me, but they refuse to listen and continue towards the bright light ... away from Rohan ... I struggle to free myself...

That’s when I woke up; struggling with the sheets and realised it is a brand new day with no mistakes!!!

This is a story I have written for the "Ascension" short fiction contest after Vin threatened me with dire consequences if I did not participate :P

If you haven't participated yet, then rush your entries. Contest closes on 14th of this month...looking forward to read your entries :)

11 comments:

  1. Walk in the clouds! Walk in the clouds! HEEEEHAAA HAAA

    All The Best, girl..Sawan saar has stiff competition now :)

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  2. For some reason I've turned to mixed-media. I like seeing pictures along side the narrative. I also like illustrations if they're not too cartoonish--had a few stories published with an artist's vision. As for your story, I guess what I didn't see the last time is a visual from those heavy clouds to your character's sheets in the end. For some reason that's what sticks out in my mind's eye.

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  3. Wish you Goodluck ... i'm sure u'll do well! ... too early for me, i guess, to participate in such contests!

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  4. ahem ahem now who is Mr Rohan- Jijabhai eh?? :P :P :P

    lol...good luck Sen - the story has a fairy tale touch which is a good sign as I find less fairy tales these days...

    (why fairy tale- reasons

    1) Heaven, 2) Chariot, 3) Angels, 4) Happily ever after ending :P)

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  5. @ Viniee....thanks girl!!!

    @ JR...thanks for stopping by...thats what I had in mind when I wrote this story :)

    @ Josh...thanks!!!

    @ Karmanna...thanks!!!

    @ Sush...send in your entry...there is no such thing as "too early"..

    @ Lancelot...Rohan is the love of my life...but he does not know it...go figure :P :P :P

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  6. @Rita O Sen All The Very Best!!

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  7. cool.. first poetry then short story.. what is next.. painting? sculpture? ;)

    all the best BTW.. may the best player win!! :D

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  8. WOW!! Blown me away.. Thought ROHAN was your real-boy friend (may be he can, now :P)

    Chariot-Angels :)

    HAPPILY NEVER AFTER kinda fairy tale :)

    SUSPENSE, ROAMNCE, TEARS :)

    Wish you all the best :)

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